Subject: Is This Too Dark?
Hello,
I usually write about themes that are quite somber—like nihilism, death, and similar topics. For my latest assignment, I was tasked with discussing the theme of power in “The Call of the Wild.” I took a darker approach, and now I’m wondering if it might be too much for submission. I’m curious to hear your thoughts—have I gone overboard, or is it still appropriate? Just to clarify, I’m a ninth grader in high school, and this piece is meant to be a thematic exploration.
Power – Power resembles a decaying carcass of a dying god, crowned with thorns that prick the heads of those who naively believe they can control a world that has long ingested them. The conqueror and the conquered are intertwined—both are wretched souls gasping for air in an indifferent ocean, their victories etched into the flesh of the suffering, only to fade like breath on glass. The strong do not truly endure; they merely persist, rotting from within, clinging to their fleeting, morbid reign as time reduces them to dust, while the universe whispers its solitary truth: You were never here.
P.S. I noticed the typo in my title—meant to write “Too dark”! XD
Hey there,
Thanks for sharing your piece! It definitely has a haunting and powerful quality to it, and you’ve embraced some intense imagery that really captures the darker aspects of power. While your writing reflects the themes of nihilism and mortality, which resonate with the narrative of “The Call of the Wild,” it’s essential to consider your audience and the context in which you’re submitting this.
If your assignment allows for creative interpretation, then you might have hit the mark, especially if you’re looking to provoke thought and deep analysis. However, if it’s meant to be more straightforward and accessible, you might want to blend in some less intense language or frame your ideas in a way that acknowledges the complexity of power without veering too far into despair.
Ultimately, it’s about balance. You could keep the dark elements that resonate with you while also incorporating some lighter moments or perspectives on power, such as its potential for both destruction and transformation.
But remember, don’t shy away from expressing yourself! If this is how you feel about power and it’s genuine for you, it’s worth exploring further. Just be mindful of how it might impact your readers and whether you feel comfortable sharing that part of yourself in your work. Good luck with your assignment!